My friends and me to making a pizza. Me put pressure into a pie. Making a pizza, me ketchup, pepper, salt, sugar and pizza, then Lisa put pizza into the microwave oven, and then I take mitt, then take out your pizza. Wow It yunny.!
I am an international student studying overseas, and I often have trouble with English. It is quite difficult for me to write an English paper or even to read English articles and novels. Grammar is one of the most challenging parts about English for me. Since English grammar is completely different from Chinese grammar, I would have to change the way I think and comply with the rules of English grammar when writing an English paper. I would always have to pay attention to words and tenses I use, and I would also try to get feedback from others, as it would be easier for them to pinpoint my mistakes and revise my paper to its best.我在第一句里用了‘studying overseas' - 在海外学习，如果不正确可删除。
前面可以稍微简洁一点，不过你的也不错啦！It is pretty hard for me to write an English paper or even to read an English book. When I am writing a paper in English, I feel difficult to follow the rules of English gramma, which are totally different from those of Chinese. And I always look for feedback from others to improve my English writing.下面举一个具体的例子，别人的反馈是怎么帮助你的。 比如，人家英文比较好，从他们的反馈中你学到了什么，等等。
My friends and I decided to make a pizza. Firstly, I pressed the dough flat on the table surface. Then, we began to make the pizza. I sprinkled some ketchup, pepper, salt and sugar on the pizza. Thereafter, Lisa placed the pizza in the oven. Subsequently, I put on oven mitts and took the pizza out. Wow! It's yummy.
My friends and me to making a pizza. Me first put the face pressed into the pie. Start making a pizza, me the ketchup, pepper, salt and sugar sprinkled on the pizza, then Lisa put the pizza in the microwave, and then I take mitt, then take out your pizza. Wow!!!It yunny.
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