作文修改英文

Acutully,youdidaprettygoodjob.Ijustmadesomecorrections.Tuesday,March21,2006Itiscloudytoday.AgreatmannamedGoetheoncesaidthis,"Onewhodoesnotkownaforeignlanguagedoesnotknowone`sown".So,inordertoimprovemyEnglish,IboughtabookonhowtolearnEnglishquickly.IbelievethatthisbookwillgivemeagreatdealofhelpifIcouldmakefulluseofit.Ofcourse,IknowitisnnoteasytolearnEnglish.Ishouldlearnfromotherpeople,especiallythosewhospeakfluentEnglish.

您好！您这一篇文章语句通顺，少有语法错误，而且内容很实在，用词到位。本人认为并不需要做过多修改，您完全可以对您自己有信心。您并不需要苛求高级句式，有时候高级句式反而会让人混淆，您这篇文章的文风已经很好了，力求简单简洁，清楚明了，这样的文章是非常有效，令人印象深刻的。我建议您在开头或者是结尾的时候，引用名人名言，然后用一两局比较高级的句型就足够了。有一句要指出：If it is forgivable, I WILL choose to accept and give him another chance. 这里主句要用将来时还不是过去时。

想要体高英语作文写作水平在原有的基础上进行修改提升是非常有效的办法，下面我就跟你们分享下怎么修改英语作文   一、英语作文的等级   四档文：内容不完整，语言表述错误很多，不能完整地表达思想。可得0-2分   三档文：内容完整，重点描述合理，但表述不充分，层次结构不合理，语言不够流畅，字迹不够工整，5-6  处语法或拼写错误；字数不足。可得3-5分   二档文：内容完整，重点描述比较充分，层次结构比较清晰，语言比较流畅，字迹工整，有3-4处语法或拼写错误；字数符合要求。可得6-8分   一档文：内容完整，重点描述清楚、合理，表达充分，层次结构清晰，字迹工整，可读性强，语言流畅，仅有1-2处语法或拼写错误；字数符合要求。可得9-10分 二、英语作文修改案例   案例一：   A Trip to the Zoo   原稿：   Yesterday way Sunday and it was a fine day.So I take a trip to the zoo. I went there by bus, I get there at 8:00 am.There are many people.and some people watched the tigers ,some watched the monkeys, Others watched the bids,I saw many animals and I tool many phtos. That’s a interesting trip. I’ll never forget it. That’s  my trip.   修改后：   It was a sunny Sunday  After a quick breakfast , I couldn’t wait to get on the bus. This is my first time to enjoy a trip alone. Varions lovebal animals are waiting in the zoo!   As soon as I got there,  I was attracted at once.  Monkeys were climbing in the tree happily. Sometimes they even came to fetch the bananas in visitors’hands. How naughty they were! What’s more, I was also intersted in the tigers. They are called “the king of animals”,but at this moment they were lying quetly ,maybe they were sleepy. Animals ,humanbeings ,we live in a world .we are family . I t came to my mind immiediatly.   Anyway, I had an interesting trip today . It gave me a deep impression, I’ll never forget it.   案例二：   My favourite season   原稿：   There are four seasons in a year. And my favourite season is summer. Although it’s very hot. I still love it .Because I can swim in the sea .And lie in sun . That’s very comfortable.And I also can eat some Icecreams.they are delicious so there’re lots of thingd to do in summer. That’s  very intersting. So I love summer. That’s my favourite season.   修改后   My favourite season   As is all know , there are four seasons. Speaking of my favourite , summer comes first although it is hot.   Many things can be done in summer such as swimming in the sea, Lying on the beach  … How comfortable ! More importantly  I can eat delicious Icecream . Of course, we also enjoy beautiful views outside. And I’m always looking forward to going fishing with my father .   In a word ,summer is my favourite season because it brings me a lot of happiness .   三、英语作文修改的注意事项   1、整篇文章逻辑的修改.作文的目的是为了表达东西,所以首先要确保作文表达的内容是清楚并且符合逻辑的,如果段落之间都是矛盾的就说不过去了.   2、语法的修改篇章与段落的修改过后看句子的结构,说仔细了就是语法的修改.   3、还有就是单词拼写等小细节的修改了.

Last Friday was the unluckiest of this semester for me. When I got up in the morning, I went to take a drink of water and glanced at my clock. "Oh my God! It's already seven o'clock!" I exclaimed, as I got up as quickly as possible. To my surprise my parents room was very quiet. I though perhaps they were just really tired. I didn't brush my teeth as usual but ran out of the house with my bag. (这个句子：When I was just across the road, 15 car just drove...到Street lights was still lighting真的不情趣。我是美国人，但我完全不明白你的意思。。应该换一句话）When I got to school, I found I was the third to arrive. It must have been that my watch stopped. During class I failed Chinese dictation again. It was extremely upsetting. Finally, when I got home, I found I forgot to bring my Chinese homework...It was a really bad, unlucky day!:)

stories set us thinking, wondering wha

Good writing! indeed!

Telling lies are used to have bad reputation.

However, it is true that we live in a world where lies are given every day.

Teachers beautify the performance of their students to encourage confidence.

Doctors hide the truth of the illness to keep their patients optimistic.

Lovers tell sweet words to keep intimate relationship.

Because of the beautiful lies, I am deeply touched by the story in which a

painter drew a leaf everyday outside his window to raise hope of a terminally

ill patient.

Sometimes telling lies help us to deal with tough things and get another opportunity to

make it better.

Therefore, whether it is good to tell lies cannot be easily concluded by a definite answer.

Instead, it should be judged by its motivation.

As a high school student, the instruction of our teacher and the anticipation of our

parents give me great pressure.

When I did not perform quite well in the test,sometimes I told a lie to avoid letting them down.

However, as I felt ashamed and uneasy about it, I would be stimulated to study harder,

waiting for the next opportunity to prove my ability.

Followed by the same standard, when I am cheated, I persuade myself to calm down and think

about the motivation of his lies.

If it is forgivable, I chose to accept and give him another chance.

A well-known study shows that an ordinary person tells three lies one day.

Whether you like it or not, lies are given everywhere and every day.

So, I would rather enjoy it than live as a hypocrite.

Telling white lies in a necessary time and a well-meaning way, our living world is more diverse;

our lives are more interesting, full of surprise and possibilities.

原文：Last Friday was my most unlucky day of this semester。In the morning ,when I got up to drink water ,i looked the clock in the way.oh my god ! it is already seven o’colck.while i compain ,while getting up as quickly as I can . To my surprise, the room whose my parents was very quiet. I thought perhaps they much too tired. I did not brush teeth as usual,but Ran out of the house with my bag. When I was just across the road, 15 car just drove right away. But I surprised to find Street lights was still lighting. When I go to school, I found that I was the third to arrive. Oh, it must be watch has stopped.In school,I failed Chinese dictation again. I was expreme upset. When I got home, I found I should have forgot to bring Chinese homework… It was really bad lunck a day!修改文: Last Friday was indeed worst day in this semester for me. In the morning, when I got up to drink some water, I looked at the clock at the same time. Oh my god! It was already seven o'clock. Complaining and meanwhile getting up as fast as I can, to my surprise, my parents' room was very quiet. I thought that perhaps they were too tired. I did not brush teeth as usual and ran out of the house with my bag. When I was just crossing the road, 15 cars drove right passed. But I was surprised to find the street lights still on. When I went to the school, I found that I was the 3rd to arrive. Oh, it must be the watch that had stopped. In school, I failed Chinese Spelling again and I was extremely upset. When I got home, I found I should not have forgotten to bring my Chinese homework...It was really a day of pure bad luck，but wish everyone all the best for tomorrow's mock test.哈哈，挺有趣的文章，感叹用得不错，已经按照你写的改了所有的语法和拼写毛病，最后那边应该是中文听写，是Chinese spelling, 而不是Chinese diction，原文总体还可以，不过应该加把劲检查语法，很多地方以你的能力应该是可以避免的，比如过去是等等, 已经加上了对大家的祝福。谢谢，希望可以帮到你。

觉得很好呀！题目的话，Lie or not