1. No one could understand me alone 是副词,在这里修饰动词 understand 了,意思成了“没有人能够单独地懂得我”。 understand 后应该改动如下: 宾语从句—— undestand that I am alone (或者lonesome) and gentle. 直接宾语—— undestand my loneliness and gentleness2. I tender, tender 侧重于脆弱,形容词最好用gentle,名词用 gentleness。3. I am weak, weak 意思是虚弱,表示身体欠佳,如果用形容词,改为 effeminate,名词则用 effeminacy4. because I pretended to pretend to be strong. 1)两个 pretend 意思重复,删除一个; 2)改为进行时态 because I am pretending to be strong整体修改如下: 第一种:现在时态 * No one can undestand that I am alone , gentle and effeminate, because I am pretending to be strong. * No one can undestand my loneliness, my gentleness and my effeminacy, because I am pretending to be strong. 第二种:过去时态 * No one could undestand that I was alone , gentle and effeminate, because I was pretending to be strong. * No one could undestand my loneliness, my gentleness and my effeminacy, because I was pretending to be strong.