例子: Deciding to rescind the earlier estimate, our report was updated to include $40,000 for new equipment.
应改为 Deciding to rescind our earlier estimate, we have updated our report to include $40,000 for new equipment. (We决定呀, 不是report.)
(2)句子不要零碎。
例子: He decided not to audit the last ten contracts. Because of our previous objections about compliance.
两个句子应该连在一起:He decided not to audit the last ten contracts because of our previous objections about compliance.
(3)结构对称,令人容易理解。
例子: The owner questioned the occupant's lease intentions and the fact that the contract had been altered with ink markings.
应改为: The owner questioned the occupant's lease intentions and ink alterations of the contract.
(4)单复数不要搞乱,不然会好刺眼,看着不舒服。
例如: An authorized person must show that they have security clearance.应改为 Authorized persons must show that they have security clearance.
(5)动词和主语要呼应。
想想这两个句子的分别: 1. This is one of the public-relations functions that is under-budgeted. 2. This is one of the public-relations functions, which are under-budgeted.
(6)时态和语气不要转换太多。看商务英语已经是苦事,不要浪费人家的精力啊。
(7)标点要准确。例如: He did not make repairs, however, he continued to monitor the equipment. 应改为: He did not make repairs; however, he continued to monitor the equipment.