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I am not outgoing,so it was easy for me to bear loneliness.And the distance between my home and this university,which is 2410 kilometers,makes the situation(it) even worse.For me, being far away from home means I have to bear the loneliness and take care of myself.All these things have to be done just on my own.Everytime I see the moon and try desperately not to miss home and friends,the feeling of this keeps haunting me.(我说，把想家翻来覆去说这么多遍有意义么？既然是想家，统一在一个分段里比较好) I am still in touch with all my friends, but I do not have enough courage to tell them that I miss them.During the call,I just said something funny which happened here to cover my real feelings. Looking at the moon,missing my family and friends and crying stealthily,do these things have to fill my life when being far away from home?真情实感倒是有，但是意境没有表达到位。 如楼上所言，太中式了。

As a matter of fact，I am layfolk who works in the drugstore.Though English is just my hobby,nothing in the world can delight me so much as learning English.I have learnt English bymyself for two years.As an old saying goes"Success belongs to the persevering",and I will try mybest to learn English well.擅自加了几句完善一下。我的翻译大致是这样的，事实上，我只是一个在药店工作的普通人（将后面的我是个很普通的人前移，不会显得繁琐）英语只是我的业余爱后，但是在这世界上（其实这个可以不用，但是加上去可以强调你热爱英语。但如果是作文的话，可能会太显极端，真不是特别喜欢英语的话不要用）没什么比学英语更能让我高兴（如果不想要可以删去，逗号改句号）我已经自学了两年英语。有一句俗语说的好，坚持就是胜利，我将尽我所能去学好英语（不要也可以删去）可能会有打字错误或漏打，请原谅！

你最好能把你的中文意思也说出来，不然大家很难明白你想表达什么意思。下面是我自己理解后修改的句子，不知道是否符合你想的意思。Butbeingbraveistomakeachoice(forourlifeandnevergiveitup,youwillfinallyfindyourhappiness)因为动词在to后面，所以保持现在时态即可，句子中的and是连接两个形式相同的动词(make和give)，所以不能用giving,而且，一般不会同时出现But和and来连接两个并列句子，况且你这里也解释不通。另外，由于你前面用的being(我可以理解为一般时态的假设语句)，因此后面可以直接用将来时态will，而不要用过去将来时态would，如果要用would的话，前面应该用过去式(但是单独看这句话，好像行不通)。

"In fact , I was a pharmacy clerk , English is only my hobby , I taught has been two years , I was a very ordinary person 谷歌翻译"In fact, I is a small pharmacy staff, English is only my hobby, I taught myself two years, I am a very ordinary person 有道翻译"In fact, I am a drugstore clerk, English is just my hobby, I taught for two years, I am a very ordinary person 百度翻译

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第一段:hope应改为hoping,因为前面的句子已经是完整的句子了，应用现在分词作状语。

第二段：i am free 应用将来时，还未发生，还不确定，改为i will be free or i might be free.

第三段：1.convenice为名词，这里谓语为are,宾语应用形容词，所以改为you are convenient.

2.to let me kown中的to应删去，这里是祈使句句型，直接用动词原型即可.

第四段：if you had already selected中应改为have,回顾通篇时态为现在时，而had表过去

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①祈使句句型：动词原型开头，省略主语，也可加上please+动词原型。

②现在完成时和过去完成时的区别

现在完成时

构成：have /has +done/been done

用法：

1动作发生在过去对现在的影响

eg:The possibility has been dismissed that he has liver failure.

2 动作开始于过去，一直持续到现在

eg:How long have you lived here?

3在时间条件壮语从句中，用现在完成时替代将来完成时

eg:When you have finished the magazine,please lend it to me.

过去完成时

构成：had + done/been done

由时间状语来判定,与过去完成时连用的时间状语有：

1. by + 过去的时间点。如： I had finished reading the novel by nine o'clock last night.

2. by the end of + 过去的时间点。如： We had learned over two thousand English words by the end of last term.

3. before + 过去的时间点。如： They had planted six hundred trees before last Wednesday

③现在分词做状语

现在分词短语可以用作状语，修饰句子中由谓语表示的主要动作。这个状语可以表示动作发生的时间、原因、结果、条件、方式或表示主要动作发生的伴随情况，通常相当于一个状语从句或并列分句

bear lonely改为LONELINESSthere is 改为IT ISfar away 前面加个BEINGmeans 后面加个THATI keep in touch with all my friends,I did not have enough courage to tell them 中的“，”改为“。”have to full of 的TO后面加个BEI far away 的I后面加个AM总得来说还不错，只是太中式了些。建议多作阅读

最后一句,Do these things have to fill my life up when I am so far away from my home?